Published September 7, 2006
(I feel obligated to at least try, so here are my notebook scratchings.)
Hey, Miss Beautiful
Can you feel the buzz?
Lithium is lying on your tongue
and you - you are still young,
in a map of painted faces
and the molting wings of grace,
all in this flurry of
the sentimental race
to taste - this bit of stranger things,
to join a world enclosed in danger,
to smash the candles,
burn the manger.
Hey, Miss Beautiful,
you are the lastest buzz.
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I don't usually enjoy rythming, but I think you pulled it off quite nicely.
this was very beautiful to me. i'm not quite sure what you were trying to communicate, but it was really cool and very pretty. i loved the lines "to join a world enclosed in danger, to smash the candles, burn the manger." gorgeous.